I wrote lyrics for my song, but English is not my native language, so there may be some mistakes in word choice, or phrases, or style maybe. Can you check it and indicate my errors?
If I let you know how I love you,
If I let it flow now and show you
How I feel, then will you say 'Me too',
Won't you?
If I let you know how I miss you,
If I let it grow now and kiss you,
Will you go or will you kiss me too,
Won't you?
If I say I'm missing you so badly,
Everyday I love you more and more,
Will you stay or will you go away?
I must know it for sure.
If I let you know how I need you,
If I let it show now and lead you
To my heart, then will you need me too,
Won't you?
Thank you for help. I made a new version, can you look through it? I cut out 'now' from all verses, but I need something instead that rhymes with 'how'. If I bring 'now' back, will it sound too ridiculous?
If I let you know how I love you,
If I let it flow *** and show you
How I feel, I hope you'll say 'Me too',
Won't you?
If I let you know how I miss you,
If I let it grow *** and kiss you,
I believe that you will say 'Me too',
Won't you?
If I say I want you to be near me,
Everyday I love you more and more,
Will you stay or will you run away?
I must know it for sure.
If I let you know how I need you,
If I let it show *** and lead you
To my heart, I hope you'll need me too,
Won't you?